The Halloween Treat
I took off my Halloween costume, Washed the paint off my face, put on my pajamas and went to bed. I was almost asleep when I heard the first noise from my closet. I hurried and put my covers over my face, because I thought it was self defense. After the first noise I thought it was nothing but as I started falling back asleep it happened again. This time it wasn't the same noise. It sounded like crunching. I wasn't sure what it could be. The only thing in there was my clothes and my candy. The noise then came again. So I stood up and walked to the door with my pillow, just encase I had to smash someone or something. Then I opened the door and, guess what was in there. My little brother eating my candy! Turns out I did need the pillow. When I was finished with him my pillow Would be flat.
Your story was great! I loved that ending, since I can relate with my own little brother! Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteI loved this because you built suspense as I was reading. I don't think you really need to change anything. Anyways, great job!
ReplyDeleteI liked it because you beat up your little brother. I thought it was really funny. I think you don't need to change anything, it's a really good story.
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