MY HALLOWEEN STORY
One Halloween night, Lia and I were heading back to her house after a long night of trick or treating and we saw strange lights in the rough, rocky road. We passed a black cat with rough, dirty fur and realized the cat's eyes were reflecting. We both were a bit confused because the cat just appeared right in front of our eyes. We screamed and ran back to Lia's house, and we dropped all of our candy. We were starving by the time we got home. since we had no candy to eat, all we had to eat was cheese and crackers! NOBODY LIKES CHEESE & CRACKERS!!!!!!!!!!! All of a sudden, the same black cat with the dirty fur, appeared on the movie screen. We both screamed and ran for our lives. Then, The unthinkable happens...........................
I love how you explained everything with great detail it created a vision in my mind. The only thing that I would suggest is to write a little but more, but otherwise fantastic!
ReplyDeleteCome on cheese and crackers are way better than sugar and fat compacted in a wrapper. The story was great but you got to finish the story.
ReplyDeletegreat job i really liked it and it was interesting.
ReplyDeleteI did like the story and I think many people will agree with me, but it is to short maybe next time tried to make the story a little longer.
ReplyDeleteI did like the story and I think many people will agree with me, but it is to short maybe next time tried to make the story a little longer.
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