Tuesday, October 25, 2016

Halloween Short Story

I was sitting in my bed looking at the closet door. The closet door kept squeaking and the door kept moving back and forth. I tried to go back to bed but that noise was keeping me awake. When I finally had enough I got out of my bed and tiptoed to the closet door. When I got closer I thought I saw a clown so I ran back to my bed. I peaked out above by blanket and saw it was just my red coat. I went back to bed but woke up later to the squeaking sound. I closed my eyes and ran to my closet door and swung it opened. When I opened my eyes and saw a clown. I ran back to my bed and was scared to death. Then I heard laughing and peeked up above my blanket. I saw my older brother Charlie laughing his head off in a clown costume. He looked at me and said, " Happy Halloween Sucker!" I knew that this was the beginning of Halloween.

7 comments:

  1. This was a good story and I once wrote a similar story about a older sibling dressing up as something else, you also had a great ending. One thing you could do better is to write another paragraph and add more detail but other than that it was good!

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  2. That was a great story and it was funny great job. I can so relate to that

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  3. That was a great story and it was funny great job. I can so relate to that

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  4. Great post Indy! I love how you used a hyperbole when you said you were "scared to death." You did a great job gradually building up suspense. If you were to revise, maybe you could add some details about the setting and the protagonist to give the reader a better understanding of the story. Keep up the great work!

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  5. Great post Indy! I love how you used a hyperbole when you said you were "scared to death." You did a great job gradually building up suspense. If you were to revise, maybe you could add some details about the setting and the protagonist to give the reader a better understanding of the story. Keep up the great work!

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  6. Good job! Your story had suspense and a little bit of fear in it to. One thing you could of done was add another paragraph, but other wise, great job!

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  7. Great job. I loved your story! You had me have suspense and a little fear because I hate clowns. I can totally relate because I have an older brother that tries to scare me with clowns. One thing you can add is a little bit more detail so we know where the setting is but good job

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