Tuesday, October 18, 2016

Halloween Short Story

            My brother and I were walking through the woods one Halloween when we saw what appeared to be a short cut "Let's go that way," my brother said.
But I wasn't sure if we should go that way because the all trees were dead and crows were the only birds you could see.  "I don't think that's a good idea," I said.
"What are you afraid of, we will be fine," said my brother
"Okay, fine, but if we get lost or are late getting home it will be your fault,"
So we walked down the old path I had a bad feeling about it but I didn't say anything, after walking for awhile we saw a sign that said, "Beware horrifying things are ahead!"
I was a worried, but before I could say anything my brother already had started walking.
"Didn't you read the sign? It says don't go any further,"
"We'll be fine it's just a sign, what's the worst that could happen,"
I knew I wasn't going to convince him that it was a bad idea so I kept walking. A little while after we started walking again I noticed that the sun was about to set, I think my brother noticed too because he said, "We need to find a good place to sleep; I have a feeling that we won't make it home before the sun goes down, it will be to dangerous,"
Even though I knew he was right I still wasn't sure it was a good idea.
Soon after he said that we saw a old house, but it  looked as if no one has lived there in many years.
"This will be good enough for the night," My brother said as he was looking into the window of the house.
"Okay whatever," I had given up trying to convince him that this is a bad idea. When we walked in there was a ton of old and dusty furniture pieces. We found some old blankets and pillows. My brother fell asleep as soon as he hit the pillow, but I couldn't fall asleep, I kept hearing sounds of many people laughing. Finally I decided to go check it out.  So I quietly walked upstairs and opened the door, and I saw a ton of witches in the room making a potion! One of them yelled in an old raspy voice, "What are you doing here?!" I screamed and ran out of there as fast as I could, My brother heard my screaming and followed he out of the house. We ran as fast as we could and didn't stop until we got back to my house, that's the last time I take a short cut.

4 comments:

  1. Your story was funny with a touch of fear. I like how you explained how the house looked and what was inside. Something you could change is adding just a touch more detail.

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  2. I loved your story, Brooklyn! I loved the detail you used! It started out with fear, then humor! I just wish you could make a clearer image with some scenes. Otherwise, it was great!

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  3. I've got goosebumps! Your story was scary, and suspenseful! I loved the way you hinted that scary things were ahead. An unknown shortcut, a warning sign, and an abandoned house!? It doesn't get much scarier than that! If you were to revise, consider adding more details about the house and the witches. I can't wait to read more of your writing. Great work!

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  4. I didn't think your story would be that scary until the part when you guys went in the old house. It was great. I like how you put all the detail in. Keep up the good work!

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