Everybody said the old Bosworth mansion was haunted but I didn't believe it myself. That is until I actually did find out it was haunted.
It was late into the night of August 17th and there was a slight breeze, my friend and I didn't believe the rumor that was spreading throughout the neighborhood. The truth was I didn't want to believe it, iv'e been afraid of ghosts ever since I knew they existed. We crept up on the eerie setting of the old Bosworth mansion my friend saw a black cat and he thought we were doomed, but I told him that was a myth. The house was deserted long ago so we were clear to go inside. We walked around the bottom floor for about twenty minutes and then went up stairs when we heard a strange noise coming from the hall we immediately stopped. That was when we saw a white cloud in a figure of a human hovering above the ground. We started running for the stairs but then a river of rats poured through the guest bedroom in the way the boys were running so they went back down the other stair case. Each of them left in a full sprint back to their homes.
They would talk about this story with anyone that would listen. Most didn't believe it as they thought but some did. Few dared to enter this massive haunted mansion but if they did they were never seen again.
This is really good. It was entertaining to read. I could picture this story in my head! May be next time try to add a little bit more to your writing! good job!
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ReplyDeleteI liked your story! You probably need some commas and more story but other than that it was great!
ReplyDeleteI really like your story Ben! I think it is scary and weird at the same time. Weird in a good way. When I read it, I was a little bit scared. I think your story could've used more detail and some transitions. Other than that, IT WAS COOL.
ReplyDeleteI really liked this. I liked how you explained the figure as a white cloud that looked like a human. It was amazing.
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